Nine Ways to Hook Your Reader With a Powerful Opening Sentence.

Nine ways to hook your reader

with a powerful opening sentence.



Maybe you’re like me in that your blank computer screen acts a bit like an impenetrable wall one moment and an empty canvas of possibilities, awaiting your inspired ideas the next.

Picture it… While you’re hanging out at your local coffee shop, a girl at the table near yours tells her friend about an incident at school involving their class guinea pig, a projector cord, and a schoolwide black out. Your eyes bulge behind your iced cappuccino. What you just overheard is the makings of a humorous story.

Over the next number of days or weeks, you create a list of characters and give each a life and a history. The story problem becomes clear as you plot the grandest of all middle-grade adventures. Notes in hand, you sit before your laptop, typing out that first brilliant sentence that will have readers begging to know what happens next.

That’s about the time your inner editor bluntly tells you that what you wrote is sludge. “That gopher hole in your back yard,” she says, “has a better opening than this!”

Delete, delete, delete…

Where to start?


1. Begin with one attention-grabbing word.

Darkness. Pitch darkness filled every square inch of my school today thanks to our class guinea pig, Percival Pickles.

2. Make a comparison.     

I wish I had been placed in Mr. Dowfeld’s class with the hairy tarantula instead of in Mrs. Peach’s class with Percival Pickles, a guinea pig with serious powers.

3. Start with a powerful moment that raises curiosity.

Every room in my school went into a sudden blackout.

4. Begin with a fact.

Not every guinea pig makes a good classroom pet.

5. What sound can be heard?

Nibble, munch, squeeee! All of Lincoln Jr. High fell into darkness when Percival Pickles, our class guinea pig, bit the projector cord.

6. Start with a question.

What happens when a guinea pig mistakes the projector cord for his lunch?

7. Open with a fact that hints at something significant.

Death is merely one side effect that comes when a classroom pet electrocutes itself.

8. Begin with an intriguing fact.

Nobody, not even Percival Pickles, our classroom guinea pig, could believe an electrical shock could shoot his IQ off the charts.

9. Let your readers hear the compelling voice of your main character.

At 8:15 this morning, the single most important thought peddling through my head was to scamper to my squeaky wheel and play. Twenty-three minutes later, I’m well into understanding Einstein’s theory of relativity.

If you have a favorite way to hook readers with a great opening, I invite you to post it in the comments.

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16 thoughts on “Nine Ways to Hook Your Reader With a Powerful Opening Sentence.

  1. Leslie…I don’t know if you even realize what an incredibly helpful post this is! I love that you gave concrete examples of each opening choice…and the fact that you used the same ‘story’ made it even more easy to visualize. Fabulous…I will be using this as I check each of my manuscript openings from now on.

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    • Dear Vivian,
      You are so kind.In writing this post, I thought about the parts of the writing process that frustrate me and figured if something challenges me, others probably run up against this, too. I have a feeling more ways exist to inspire greatness into the first sentence, but at least these nine “doors” are available to open.


  2. I agree. What an amazing gift. This felt a bit like watching a talented musician play “Twinkle” in different styles. Using the same story idea really made your examples shine. I will definitely be posting this next to my computer. 🙂

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  3. This is very helpful! So many unique ways to pursue a hook sentence or opening. I don’t think I’ve ever seen anything like this. Thank you so much!

    You left a comment on my review of “Big Red and Little Bitty Wolf.” The author stopped by and left a comment for you about how she named the owl.

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    • Hi, Patricia! I’m happy you like my post. I knew I couldn’t be the only writer struggling with that elusive first sentence. I think I average a dozen first sentences per piece I’m working on. This template takes that process from frustrating to fun. With these prompts, I now love finding the best way into my story.

      Thanks for letting me know about the comment left by the author of Big Red and Little Bitty Wolf. I just took a quick break from writing this letter to you to pop over to your blog and leave a comment for her.

      See you again on Friday for PPBF!

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